Right guys. This is my first story so reach me some genuine feedback please. This story does n't specifically involve any sex. It 's just a template. I want to do things differently here. I want to know what you want me to do to the characters. Who you want to see ravaged, who you want killed ect ect. You dictate the next chapter. It 's that simple. Leave some comments on what you would like to happen in part 2 and itll be up this metre next week.


Cara had had enough

She had had enough of her overly protective mother always dictating to her what she can and ca n't do. She had had enough of her obsessively aggressive male parent and his unpredictable outbursts of anger. And she had had enough of her disgustingly annoying little shit of a brother who never knew when enough was enough. Cara had had enough. It was time to get her fucking revenge

Ever since Cara can retrieve, she 's always been a small bit messed up in the head. Having the dirtiest thoughts, the sickish fantasies about what she wanted done to her and what she wanted done to others. She was the mucky, craziest cunt around. No one knew this though. She put on a frontal of being polite little shy introvert Cara, everyone believed the front she put on. Now at 17, Cara decided it was clock time to let mass see the real her

Mon evening
Cara pretended everything was formula. She sat at the dinner party table and did what was expected of her. She ate her Green River. She said please and thank you. She muttered the lords prayer along with them. She did what was expected.

'Cara, your awfully pipe down tonight'her father asked suspiciously

'Im just waiting for them dad'Cara replied

Her father gave her a at sea look. 'Waiting for who darli ....

He never got to finish that condemnation. That 's when Caras Night of revenge started.

The room access flew open and in came 7 hooded figures. All holding guns. They moved towards the terrorised family.

'What the fuck'screamed Caras father as he stood up to protect his family

'SIT THE roll in the hay DOWN'menaced one of the hooded figures, pointing his gun directly at the Father-God head.

'Sit down or your wife gets a bullet up her puss, you want that faggot ?'shouted another one of the figures

Caras father sat down. By this pointedness Lil disco biscuit had climed on to his mother and was crying uncontrollably. He had his side buried in his manpower and his female parent was trying to stay on calmness for his sake.

'What do you want ? Please. If its money that you want just take it. You can have anything. Please just dont hurt us'Caras female parent begged

They laughed.

'Bitch if we wanted money we would of surcharge a bank now would n't we. Nar it 's not money we want .'

He then went into a bag that one of the guy rope was holding and proceeded to pull out four blindfolds and 3 pieces of long rope. Everyone by this point was terrified, even Caras father was shaking.

'What are those for ?'he half demand

His inquiry did n't need a spoken solvent. Instead, the leader of the group walked menacingly towards him and violently got a grip of his neck and wrapped the blindfold round his face. Ted tried struggling but there was no use. The hooded hooligan then proceeded to tie his men behind his back with one of the small-arm of the Mexican valium and did the Lapp with his legs. He then tossed Ted onto the floor where he could n't move. He was completely helpless.


Norah had never been so scared in all her life. As Adam clung on to her, she did n't receive a cue what to do. Her husband was tied up on the floor and there was unknown, dangerous alien in her dining room pointing a gun at her. Why were they here ? If they did n't want money what did the deficiency ? Norah did n't desire to know the answer but was certainly she was going to find out.

The leader walked up to her and looked her in the eye

'Hello beautiful'

'Fuck you'she screeched in response. She did n't want to support down to these people.

'Now that 's not a very decent way to address to your Guest now is it ?'

Once again, determined not to back down, 'Fuck. You .'

He was n't having any of it. All of a sudden he punched her right in the nerve and she fell to the storey. Crying uncontrollably and nose bleeding, Norah was shocked. Adam was completely terrified and ran to the niche, crying all the while.

While the butchery escalated, Cara just sat there. equanimity and controlled. She was n't shocked or phased by the whole panorama. She sat there expressionless. Mesmerised by the wreckage of her entirely family social unit

While all this was going on, the other 6 figures just stood there. Overseeing the brutal treatment of this pathetic phratry. The plan was going so perfect.

'Now listen to me slit. I 'm about to give this elbow room with your beautiful daughter. If you want her back live, I suggest you do n't proceed. My admirer will be staying here so unless you want a bullet through your skulls, I suggest you stay seated'

No one moved.

He went over to cara and ragged her up and went towards the stair. He stopped abruptly and turned towards XTC

'Little boy, look at your pathetic cunt of a dad and slut whore twat of a mother. After I 'm done with this bitch I 'm coming down for you. Look forward to it'and with that he turned and dragged cara up the stairs


When they got up there, Cara could verbalise freely.

'This is the fucking most craziest matter EVER !'cara shouted.

'Keep your vocalization down man, do you need them to know your involved ? Now seriously Cara, are you sure about this ? I mean, this is pretty fucked up. Your brothers terrified man'

'Are you backing out on me stratagem ? You said you 'd be up for this ?'

'I am. I am, its just are you certain you want to go through with this ? It 's your class ...'

'My family ? You mean the same family that 's treated me like shit for 17 years ? No Dodge, I want them fucked up. I want them ruined'

Dodge just looked into her oculus. What had made her like this ? Why was she so ... Evil ?

'Okay. Who first ?'



End of innovation. Like I said, no sex, however, tell me what you want happening ? Who 's first ? Want to see the Lil boy raped by 7 hooded figures ? Or what about the mum, forced incest maybe ?

Or what about lineament development ? Want to know how Cara knows Dodge ? Who is Dodge ? Why is Cara so messed up ?

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